Nah, I'm being totally honest. It's
NOT because I like you and don't want to hurt your feelings by giving you false praise. If I thought it was no good I just wouldn't say anything. Maybe just tell you how proud I am of you. That's just me. I'm uncomfortable giving criticism, but I am honest.
Having said that, I do think you have a real talent for writing. Yes you're only in your writing infancy, but I was impressed. I found the book hard to put down. It was interesting and I didn't mind the occasional swearing. It fit the emotions you were feeling.
I thought the story flowed pretty well.
I do think it was probably a good thing you took some of the bad language out in the very beginning, even though it lost a little of it's anger and WTF. LOL I just think too much can turn some reader off too soon.
It looks good now.
I sure wouldn't give up writing if I were you, but I do realize you have a busy job too.